theunknownranger
Just the Beast Under Your Bed
gleasonator forums gets me through the boring days! :)
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Post by theunknownranger on May 11, 2007 22:31:43 GMT -5
Summer, summer long and hot No more school, just lots of tv til my brain rots Swimming, playing, and lots of fun Grilling hamburgers, DONT FORGET THE BUNS Visiting friends every day I wish the entire year could be this way Good bye school, no more learning Time to get the video game for which i've been yearning Traveling around by car, plane, or boat Drinking a nice cold root beer float Staying up all night and sleeping late Times running out at an alarming rate It's August now and time for school And you take one last swim in your sparkling pool You drag your feet to the doors of the dreaded site And once again you are bored out of your might And so you wish for Summer to come to you And once again it finally comes out of the blue And now you relax for here comes the Summer For you are soon to have days that are alot funner!
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Post by Kirei on May 13, 2007 21:47:22 GMT -5
Ooooh~
I like rhyming poems~ It is kidish and all, but it just adds to the effect of summer, which is all about the kids. It well reflects how you kinda feel about summer, is simple, no-complicated words~ (I am seriously NOT trying to offend you in any way)
And over all, it's fun to read and see what the next line is going to be~
--this has been a critique by kirei--
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Post by MarioOfTheStars on May 13, 2007 21:52:13 GMT -5
AMAZING!
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Post by Trogdor on May 13, 2007 22:06:36 GMT -5
Summer, summer long and hot No more school, just lots of tv til my brain rots Swimming, playing, and lots of fun Grilling hamburgers, DONT FORGET THE BUNS Visiting friends every day I wish the entire year could be this way Good bye school, no more learning Time to get the video game for which i've been yearning Traveling around by car, plane, or boat Drinking a nice cold root beer float Staying up all night and sleeping late Times running out at an alarming rate It's August now and time for school And you take one last swim in your sparkling pool You drag your feet to the doors of the dreaded site And once again you are bored out of your might And so you wish for Summer to come to you And once again it finally comes out of the blue And now you relax for here comes the Summer For you are soon to have days that are alot funner! BRILLIANT!! And how can your brain rot? Your brain is pretty much a calculator.
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theunknownranger
Just the Beast Under Your Bed
gleasonator forums gets me through the boring days! :)
Posts: 180
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Post by theunknownranger on May 14, 2007 17:43:01 GMT -5
yay. for once marioofthestars approves of a post of mine!
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Post by Balmung Of The Azure Sky on May 14, 2007 20:59:28 GMT -5
*claps* But guess what?! We don't get back till September this year, so that means THREE whole months of summah!
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Post by odd odd on May 14, 2007 21:14:24 GMT -5
*claps* But guess what?! We don't get back till September this year, so that means THREE whole months of summah! I don't find that at all good. We get back in school in late late August, but next year we get out of school in JUNE. What the crap is this?! Pure, total crap. *cry*
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Post by Gleasonator on May 14, 2007 21:21:05 GMT -5
I wait all year for Summer to come and with a cheer the school turns dumb.
Yet now I sit with nothing to do but lay around and wait for something new.
Then alas, but yay! School comes again! Oh what am I thinking? We're like pigs in a pen!
Story of my life.
I like your poem, Jamie, but I've done that six times already, and now I feel like I need something new but I don't know what it is. >.<
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Post by minimcbeef on May 14, 2007 21:22:51 GMT -5
Yep. Good poems, guys...
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teedubya
Closet Creature
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Post by teedubya on May 14, 2007 22:02:02 GMT -5
apparently we have a great deal of undiscovered talent in this place.....
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Post by Gleasonator on May 14, 2007 23:03:46 GMT -5
I am 90% creative.
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Post by SkullFarmer on May 15, 2007 8:55:31 GMT -5
Yet now I sit with nothing to do but lay around and wait for something new. I like your poem, Jamie, but I've done that six times already, and now I feel like I need something new but I don't know what it is. >.< Nothing really good ever comes without some personal involvement on your part. You can't hit the target if you don't know what it is. Think about it.
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Post by Kirei on May 15, 2007 19:09:39 GMT -5
I am 90% creative. .... and the other 10%..? (^.^)
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Post by TheYellowStain on May 23, 2007 7:07:25 GMT -5
im sad..lots of my 8th grade freind will be leaving this year,i might see some in two year, but most are gone forever, same with some my friends next year, it will very sad....the last days of school next year.
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